Firstly, THANK you for writing proper drabbles that are 100 words. There is just something so gorgeous about a piece that is exactly 100 words. Not 99, not 101, but 100. There's just such precision to the word choice. And you did a fantastic job with that here.
I loved the theme you worked with, the first and last. This is a rare moment where you can read a River fanfic and it almost feels linear. That still feels right though because where in River's POV. And because I read them back-to-back and they were the same amount of words, it kinda feels like they are both happening at the same time and that is very River-Doctor.
I really liked your first idea of how she met him. I wonder what the Doctor's POV of that event is. Because in many ways, it seems like the modus operandi for his companion acquisition, but then River is so not the usual companion and he'd know that. The way he picked her up was a great echo of the setting of that scene. Meaning, there she is, doing her usual thing, something casual and routine, but it really hides the true depth of adventure she was about to walk into. In the same, the casual almost routine pick-up of companion on the Doctor's part hides the truly amazing adventure they're about to start according to her timeline. Love that.
And then the last scene. I might have less words to say about it but only because it affected me even more emotionally. These two lines here: 'It was a full time job to keep him alive, and it wasn't going to be her job any longer. He had saved her, in a different way than he usually did.' I nearly cried. Maybe because I'm sleep-deprived (since I'm usually not that physically emotional) but even then, those were some really emotionally evocative sentences. They have so much deeper meaning than someone not aware of canon would think from the particular words alone. Great job there.
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Date: 2011-02-02 06:18 pm (UTC)I loved the theme you worked with, the first and last. This is a rare moment where you can read a River fanfic and it almost feels linear. That still feels right though because where in River's POV. And because I read them back-to-back and they were the same amount of words, it kinda feels like they are both happening at the same time and that is very River-Doctor.
I really liked your first idea of how she met him. I wonder what the Doctor's POV of that event is. Because in many ways, it seems like the modus operandi for his companion acquisition, but then River is so not the usual companion and he'd know that. The way he picked her up was a great echo of the setting of that scene. Meaning, there she is, doing her usual thing, something casual and routine, but it really hides the true depth of adventure she was about to walk into. In the same, the casual almost routine pick-up of companion on the Doctor's part hides the truly amazing adventure they're about to start according to her timeline. Love that.
And then the last scene. I might have less words to say about it but only because it affected me even more emotionally. These two lines here: 'It was a full time job to keep him alive, and it wasn't going to be her job any longer. He had saved her, in a different way than he usually did.' I nearly cried. Maybe because I'm sleep-deprived (since I'm usually not that physically emotional) but even then, those were some really emotionally evocative sentences. They have so much deeper meaning than someone not aware of canon would think from the particular words alone. Great job there.
Lovely pieces!